I love the fact that the only details you gave about your story are money, skin color, country of origin.
Maybe the problem is that if your character is only defined by their skin color and wealth, it’s not a very good character. You should be able to have a better description of someone than just talking about their skin color and bank account.
So it feels a bit shallow, from whatever small information you gave, which might be what your friend picked on.
DagwoodIII@piefed.social 2 weeks ago
All stories are stupid.
It’s the writers’ job to make them interesting.
A lot of the most popular heroes are rich. Heck, Richie Rich comics were a thing for decades.
givesomefucks@lemmy.world 2 weeks ago
OP gave some surface level details that are pretty much all existing tropes…
If someone read it and said they didn’t like it, the issue probably wasn’t any of the things OP said.
But writing is a skill, you don’t start out good at it, you get good by doing it a lot. Every author’s first stories suck